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Chiacchiere by fancypigeon-arpg Chiacchiere :iconfancypigeon-arpg:fancypigeon-arpg 183 22 Up in the clouds by Sergiba Up in the clouds :iconsergiba:Sergiba 242 94 Snow eden by Lapis-Razuri Snow eden :iconlapis-razuri:Lapis-Razuri 1,855 30 One Smoking Hot Fairy Tail Cover by muju One Smoking Hot Fairy Tail Cover :iconmuju:muju 3,406 89 CoverArt by APetruk CoverArt :iconapetruk:APetruk 624 10 Summernight by anndr Summernight :iconanndr:anndr 1,410 29 Aelin and Rowan by Charlie-Bowater Aelin and Rowan :iconcharlie-bowater:Charlie-Bowater 2,628 47 Character Design - Punk Sailor Moon by MeoMai Character Design - Punk Sailor Moon :iconmeomai:MeoMai 956 42 Elegant Armor Gown by Firefly-Path Elegant Armor Gown :iconfirefly-path:Firefly-Path 4,735 98 Overwatch team by Art-Calavera Overwatch team :iconart-calavera:Art-Calavera 3,539 93 The Court of Dreams by Charlie-Bowater The Court of Dreams :iconcharlie-bowater:Charlie-Bowater 4,721 221 Casual Shepard by Arlmuffin Casual Shepard :iconarlmuffin:Arlmuffin 3,633 115 song pipes by VanHeist song pipes :iconvanheist:VanHeist 687 132 witches sabbat by chazillah witches sabbat :iconchazillah:chazillah 490 8 Demons of Demonslayer by Phobs Demons of Demonslayer :iconphobs:Phobs 5,837 148

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Originality in art, as in most things, is almost a myth. There's nothing that hasn't been done or said. What separates artworks then? What makes them different from each other? Point of view. Nobody can see something precisely the same way as you do, your vision of the world is entirely original, even if the message itself is not. There may be a multitude of poems about sunsets, it's not an original topic, but nobody can see a sunset the way you can. Your view of any given sunset will be tinted by your experiences, your moods, where you are and who you are. Art doesn't have to be about creating something nobody has ever seen before, it can just be about showing someone a point of view they haven't seen before. Show people what you see when you look at the world.

As far as technique goes there are basic grammatical errors that you could stand to improve on. The most glaring is the use of hyphens. Talentless, copycat, unneeded, baseless, and rewriting - none of these require a hyphen and should be as written here. Grammar can often be used or misused in a sacrifice for artistic intent in poetry, but hypens here are interrupting your flow. 'Real' in line 8 should be in single quotation marks, not double. Ask yourself if a period at the end of every line is necessary. Poetry allows the period to become a mood tool and changes the feel and flow of the writing considerably. A good question to ask when you're not sure if you need one or not is 'Is this the end of a thought?'. Lines are generally used as a comma would be, same thought but a pause required. So for example in paragraph 3 I personally would leave the period for line 1, but remove it for lines 2 and 3. A period represents a lot of emphasis.

Additionally maybe play around with not always using the contracted forms of words (I'm, don't, can't etc.), using 'I am' instead of 'I'm' in some cases will sound and flow better or lend more emotion or mood to the work. Not always, but it's worth keeping in mind that you don't have to always use contractions.

Impact, as you can see there's already been comments and critiques containing considerable praise and anecdotes of how your work personally affected them. Personally I think you have a lot more potential in you to grow and learn and giving you a flawless critique now would I feel be disingenuous and discouraging. You write reasonably well, but you require practice and polishing to reach your potential. You will never please or touch every person with your writing, that is impossible. But what you can do is strengthen your technical abilities and become more comfortable with writing. When you do that writing your authentic self will be easy and enjoyable. It will be easier to understand that when people try to tear you down, that they're just expressing how they see the world, and them not being touched by your work is never a reflection on the quality and value of your work or you as a person. Keep writing.

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UrsulaDecay Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2014  Professional General Artist
Thank you for watching meeee  ^ u ^  <3
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Ormille Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Student Filmographer
Thanks for  the watch! :D
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bumble-boo Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Student Artist
Thanks so much for the watch! :)
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silvertales Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
Wow! Another fave! Thanks very much! :)
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rin-a Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
I really like your work, I'm always happy when I see you pop up in my inbox :)
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silvertales Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012
Thank you very much for the fave on my acrylic painting experiment!
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rin-a Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2012
You're most welcome. It's a beautiful painting, the kind of thing I'd love to hang on my wall.
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xthumbtakx Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012
hi! thank you so much for :+fav:ing my art!! :hug: :dalove: hope you'll check out the rest of my gallery! :D
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Britt315 Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012  Professional
Thanks very much for the watch!
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KariLiimatainen Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
:thanks: so much for the favīs !!!



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